"'Twas the Month before Christmas"

[Pelican1]

I'm feeling a little insecure/neglected because I haven't got much response (except for my faithful friend, Cooper) on my most recent poem. So I am vainly taking it out and making a new thread for it. I worked hard on this thing! Let me know if you like it.

 

It's done after "'Twas the Night Before Christmas". In some places, I put possible alternate lines in parentheses, 'cause I couldn't decide which is better. Suggestions are welcome...

 

‘Twas the month before Christmas, when all through the bar,

all the patrons were stirring…the Buffboyzz weren’t far!

 

My dollars were tucked in my pockets with care,

In hopes that CK soon would be there.

 

I sat next to Cooper, all snug on my stool,

while visions of CK’s cock made my mouth drool.

 

With Tony and Johnny and “Versatile” near,

I’d just settled down with my icy-cold beer.

 

When out near the door there arose such a clatter,

I sprang from my bench to see what was the matter!

 

Away to the lobby I flew in a flash,

Tore open my pockets, whipped out my cash!

 

The muscles that glistened on each of these guys

Made my heart quicken and made my dick rise.

 

And what, to my wandering eye, should appear,

But a gift from above – for CK was here!!

 

That hot little dancer, so lively and quick…

I knew in a moment, I must suck his dick.

 

More rapid than eagles, those Buffboyzz, they came.

Johnny whistled and shouted and called them by name:

 

Now Erick! Now Chris! Now Steven and CJ!

On Dexter! On Stevie! On Christian and CK!

 

To the back of the bar! To the top of the stairs!

Dash away! Dash away! Go and prepare!

 

As dry leaves, before a wild hurricane fly,

As they meet with an obstacle mount to the sky

 

Then up to the third floor, the dancers, they flew,

With a bag full of towels, and underwear, too.

 

And then in a twinkling, I felt on my face,

A smack from CK, then a friendly embrace.

 

As I drew in my head and was turning around,

I felt such great joy, for my CK was found!

 

He was dressed in Enyce, and a hot Detroit cap.

As he sat on the bar, I stared into his lap.

 

A bundle of goods he had under those jeans,

How I wanted a peak at his huge frank-and-beans.

(How I wanted to horde them from all of these queens).

 

His eyes, how they twinkled. His dimples, how merry.

His (ass) cheeks were like roses. His hole, like a cherry.

 

His droll little mouth was drawn up like a bow

And the beard on his chin set my heart all aglow.

 

The stump of his dick he held tight in his hands,

In my mind, I was making all kinds of great plans.

 

He had a great face, and a fine set of abs

That I wanted to touch, so I reached in and grabbed.

 

He was virile and jacked, a right-sexy young god,

I lost my mind as I gawked at his bod.

 

But a wink of his eye and a twist of his head

Soon gave me to know that I had nothing to dread.

 

He spoke a few words, then went straight to his work.

Filled hungry mouths…but not mine! What a jerk!

 

Chris took me back there to mess with CK,

It was painful to witness that horrid display!

(It was painful to watch – I looked on in dismay.)

 

But it didn’t last long, for CK is a pro…

He had “scheduled me in” for an end-of-show blow.

 

So, laying a finger aside of his hole

And giving a nod, toward the back, CK strolled.

 

I sprang from my spot and I followed him there

Finally, Santy-Claus answered my prayers!

 

The lap dance was tasty. My “stocking” was stuffed.

But I wanted more…strangely enough.

 

I couldn’t be greedy, though, Christmas was coming.

On Tuesday, I’d try to give CK more humming.

 

As I hugged him goodbye, I held onto his bottom

I thought to myself, “I finally got him!”

 

And I heard him exclaim as he left the big show

See you on Tuesday, you sucker homo!!

[LustinGuy]

That's awfully cute!

 

You New Yorkers are very fortunate!

 

Can't wait to rejoin you guys!

[Cooper]

Pelican, You are a very talented writer. Your rendition of,"Twas the Month before Christmans", describes your night at the b'boyzz party perfectly. Your time and effort in working on this labor of love is noted. CK is lucky to have a devoted friend like you.

[+ Charlie]

Pelican, you have caught everything about the "Buffboyzz experience" perfectly (except that I think "base" of his cock would be better than "stump", which has unfortunate connotations). I think you should copyright the poem before Buffboyzz tries to use it in holiday promotions.

[ValleyDwellerNorth]

>I'm feeling a little insecure/neglected because I haven't got

>much response (except for my faithful friend, Cooper) on my

>most recent poem. So I am vainly taking it out and making a

>new thread for it. I worked hard on this thing! Let me know if

>you like it.

 

BRAVO!

http://img253.imageshack.us/img253/662/animatedapplause7zg.gif

Nicely done! You have used many components of good poetry quite nicely here such as metaphor, personification, metonymy, allegory and ... SMUT! Good work!

 

PEACE

VDN

[tazmanian5230]

Although I have never had the pleasure of meeting the VDN I must say that your post have made me laugh so many times i cant keep track...

 

You have out done yourself once again!!! Your best post was the car outside the gaiety with all the dancers hanging out of the windows....

As they say, keep them coming!

 

"Not that people should be told this, but on a personal hygiene note, it's really a good idea to wash your hands after putting your fingers up a dancers' butt"

COOPER 2006

[ValleyDwellerNorth]

>Although I have never had the pleasure of meeting the VDN I

>must say that your post have made me laugh so many times i

>cant keep track...

 

I am bloated with acceptance. Thank you for your kind words.

 

>You have out done yourself once again!!! Your best post was

>the car outside the gaiety with all the dancers hanging out of

>the windows....

>As they say, keep them coming!

 

M4M message center member Buffroger gets the credit for that one. He has supplied me with many a visual gem. I am simply a humble smut clearing house.

 

VDN

http://valleydwellernorth.blogspot.com/

[Pelican1]

Thanks, guys, for responding to the poem. I feel newly-inspired and appreciated. Maybe now I can go on to write some more... I, too, loved the image from VDN. And yes, I worried about the usage of "stump" and its implications, but I wanted the connection to the original poem to be strong ("the stump of a pipe he held tight in his teeth") and, as anyone who has seen CK knows, there's really no question about his size in real life. It's quite lovely.